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Lock me up
and melt down the key,
I'm schizophrenic
can't you see?

of course you can't
you've only seen me insane,
not the other me
not my pain,

sometimes they blur
you see it in my eye,
I reply with a quick "nothing"
and force it to die,

I'm serious when I'm alone
and the sadness is instantly there,
I try to mask it
from all that care,

But recently the line that seperates
has strained, cracked, then shattered,
you've seen me cry, breakdown
all torn and tattered,

the sleek silver shards now tear at me
my minds destorted everything,
I keep feeling clawing at my arms
but brushing off nothing,

Deeper into the dark abyss I go
beams of oncomeing pulsating light,
beckons me to their side
control is now for what I fight,

for all the lights swarming around
none lead to an exit,
no roadmap for my mind
just lost and loseing it,

a jigsaw puzzle
with no final picture,
a knife slicing red runes
for no reason I'm sure,

Will I be ended by this
all this insanity and maddness,
maybe the cure is simple
just a kind word or a sweet caress.
©2005-2009 ~archmagesynok
:iconarchmagesynok:

Author's Comments

I started this poem quite awhile ago, but just finally got around to finishing it. It may seem off balance and all over the place, but that in way kinda fits. Despite the last stanza I don't know whats wrong with me or how to stop it. A preview pic will come later when I draw it.

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:iconabydell:
Wow. Kinda freaky. I don't quite get it but :shrug: I'm dumb.
I can't write, therefore I envy your skills....& Hay's, & Austen's, & David's....
Good job! :thumbsup:
:iconarchmagesynok:
Most people who read probably won't get it, your not dumb. I don't always write so people get what I'm saying, a lot like when I talk or make jokes, I use inside refrences that no one will get, except probably me, or people in the right train of thought, which is quite random tangents. But my philosophy is if I write something, let anyone read it. Even if there not that great, like this one. Theres a lot I don't like about this poem, but a lot I do. So meh, and thanks for the comment:).

--
Simon Tamm-"How do I know you won't kill me in my sleep?"
Malcolm Reynold- "You don't know me so I'll say this once, if I kill you, you'll be awake, you'll be facing me, and you'll be armed."
:iconmayhem-artist:
I tried hard to get a point across in sesquipidalianesque style (<--you can see what I mean). But you do it so simplistically and even succeed to upstage my talent. I stand back in the shadows, roll my eyes, and whistle with the utmost feeling of jealousy. Honestly, you beat me to it, long ago I wanted to write a poem called "Schizophrenia," but you beat me to the punch, so I'm free from that chore. You did it much better, too. "A knife slicing red runes": yes that's damn good!!! *sits back and nods his head in envy*

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Look, your "God" can love you all He likes, but I don't fucking like you! Welcome to my badside, we have pinball.
:iconarchmagesynok:
Thanks, but the truth is I wish I could write like you. But I don't have near the range of vocabulary that you do, and I don't feel like going to an thesaurus for every other word in my poems, but you already know those words and it makes me feel like an idiot. I've even tried to write like you, but couldn't pull it off. So I just write what comes to me.

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Simon Tamm-"How do I know you won't kill me in my sleep?"
Malcolm Reynold- "You don't know me so I'll say this once, if I kill you, you'll be awake, you'll be facing me, and you'll be armed."
:iconsaffyre-onyx:
Ah-ha!!!!! Finally something that expresses what I feel all too often!!! Thank you for writing this piece. It's awesome and very well done. :glomp:

~Aimee~
:iconghostpoet:
You captured some of what I'm feeling in here. Again you get you thoughts and feeling across clearly, maybe not to everyone but I'm sure some know exactly what you're talking about. I haven't favorited anything in a long time, I don't run across alot that I like but this I do and this I favorite. Great Job.
:iconarchmagesynok:
Thank you very much! :glomp:

--
Simon Tamm-"How do I know you won't kill me in my sleep?"
Malcolm Reynold- "You don't know me so I'll say this once, if I kill you, you'll be awake, you'll be facing me, and you'll be armed."
:iconarchmagesynok:
Thank you very much, that means a lot comeing from you, your probably the writer I look up to the most. I don't think you've ever favorited on my deviations. Thanks again:).

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Simon Tamm-"How do I know you won't kill me in my sleep?"
Malcolm Reynold- "You don't know me so I'll say this once, if I kill you, you'll be awake, you'll be facing me, and you'll be armed."
:icontraeth:
i like this a lot...gets your point across...but...nothing is wrong with you. and you're a great poet, even if you don't see it.

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Lost in the oblivions, my dreams are spires and pylons--an eclipse of horizons are all 64 worlds, magnified into the gradient there is no spine of clouds to take me back.

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